Roman Essay

John, whom we have met before, had a five-paragraph essay due in for his tenth-grade history class. Trouble was, he didn't know anything about it until someone mentioned it in the hallway as they were walking to the classroom. That left him with...four minutes. He arrived two minutes late to class, essay in hand; this is what he cooked up in those six minutes. From that standpoint, this is a rather impressive achievement. But from any other standpoint, including the teacher's...oh, dear.

The teacher's notes are in pencil and do not scan well; the substantial writings are repeated below.

[First paragraph] This says nothing

[Last paragraph] You introduce ideas here but don't follow through - Ugh!

[Evaluation] John, Be sure to use spell check and proofread. Your sentence structure is poor. This needs your attention and effort. You have fragments, and desperately need more facts. You can focus on military but be specific. You are too general. Use Your Book!! [Boob?]

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